Part 1
Reflecting on revision – Paper 2
My intro paragraph went through a lot of changes, from the first sentence all the way down to my thesis. My intro sentence in my first paragraph went into too much detail before actually letting the reader know what it was I was going to be talking about. In addition, my thesis was changed from focusing only on one paper, and turned into a focus upon many different papers. In addition to this, I changed my conclusion a ton as well. I had to add a lot more to my conclusion than anything else. It went from a very brief conclusion to more of a good ending to a paper.
Part 2
